2016年英语四级考试作文范文及点评一

　　Pickpocketing

　　Yesterday, I witnessed a theft incident on my way home. While waiting for a bus, a woman took her wallet out and paid for a newspaper at a nearby newspaper booth,. After putting her wallet back into her handbag she began to look through the new titles when a middle-aged man brushed past her muttering “Excuse me”. Swiftly, her wallet was in the man’s hand.

　　The crazy pickpocketing has become a national epidemic and poses a grave threat to the residents’ and visitors’ property safety. Pickpocketing prevention, which is a tough task for police, makes senses. All sides involved in this problem must join their efforts to remove this social cancer.

　　Everyone shares the huge responsibility for demonstrating their justice at proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious society.

　　点评

　　描述一次亲眼目睹的事实，一次引出全文的主题。Witness用词准确。Brush此处为动词，说明小偷推挤的动作想说子拂过般既轻又快，描述生动形象。含有讽刺意味的Swiftly与句中的动词brush呼应，自然承接前一句。

　　指出扒窃行为的危害，crazy，National epidemic和poses a grave threat to等词表现出此危害的严重性。Tough和句中的比喻social cancer意在谴责此类卑劣行径。

　　最后两句话呼吁大家携手努力，消除扒窃，共建和谐社会，点明文章主题。